Undiscovered

Is the clap too loud in this track? In some parts, it seems so, but others it doesnt.

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That ones dark and nasty, good job. Like i said before though, why not throw in a vocal sample or any sample for that matter, just some bait for the listener. The clap sounds fine.

Maybe for the future, you could spice up the percussion. Check out some Yoruba Soul remixes, they have the most interesting drums, not really your style of music but could give you inspiration or an idea. The "Yoruba Soul Remix" of "Tired Lil One" is a perfect example. http://www.traxsource.com/index.php?act=show&fc=tpage&cr=titles&cv=4746

... on that one.
Thanks for the push in the right direction guys.
Im picturing some kind of low dark voice rambling on about something, starting at the breakdown, that gets progressively louder and intense as the breakdown gets to its climax, then when it busts back in, at certain key points thereafter, I'll throw in certain cuts off that rambling speech.
Now,, to just find some vox that will suit this.
I wish I had a decent mic. I'd be doing these samples myself, I've got some writings I've been waiting to stick into my tracks. I've been dying to use this 32 band vocoder vst I picked up. I suppose I could use my shitty headset mic, but the sound quality on that is bunk, you can hear how that mic sounds on my song "Push". Thats what I used for the vox on that one.

...of what the breakdown sounds like with that sample I made stuck in there.

http://www.megaupload.com/?d=2I4NGEUM

I don't think I like it. Its horribly EQ'd, and the delay is too much at the end of the speech (easily changed, but just wanted to get it up here for review) Vox are insanely hard to EQ, even after I normalized it...
Can anyone do better?
Please? lol

*edit
if anyones interested, since I know the lyrics arent the clearest, from the effects that are layered, here they are.

Half the things I thought I knew,
I was only half way to understanding.
Must be The reason I ran from it all
Ran from everything, from everyone.
Still running, parallel to my fear as it holds my head in the sand;
Suffocating in the darkness.
Cut down the past to feed the thirst of negativity.
So raw, so real
Forgive, or forget;
the coin that lands on its side
Parallel to my fear as life answers its own questions,
Mocking my existance
Time to turn
Face the fear;
Cross the parallel

...is what I need to accomplish. I've got a technique thats working for me, but it needs some MAJOR refining. Pinpointing the exact frequency you want to De Ess is incredibly difficult, and is accompanied with another major problem -- the technique uses a sort of 'attack and release' technology to achieve De essing (using a "sidechain" compressor and an EQ to pinpoint the frequency(ies) you want to silence), but directly after the de ess (assuming you've pinpointed the exact freq.) the release doesnt seem to be fast enough, and is kind of muffling right after the S, or T. Only for a micro second, but its still noticeable.
This will be a skill that will take some refining.

dig it mate, maybe have another crack at the eq'ing but the feel of the vocal is great.
Id drop the very last bit of it though, i think were you have layed it is good but it dosen't need that last bit as the track is winding up.

This vocal suits the dirty feel of the track.

it with more vocoder.
As long as it dosen't get to muddy.
I cant help you with samples im afraid

u know u r ur own worst critique
lol
damn. i guess that is good in some ways...

as u stated its not my style but i did listen and it was deep and as ur boys say dark.
but it was smooth. im not sure how to say it.

im glad u provided the lyrics because i was trying to listen and couldnt catch it...lol

i found the beginning a lil long for me before the vocals popped in tho. sorry
but u cant go by anything i say. im not a dj...lol

besitos

I feel the vocals fit and are appropriate but they need to be drawn out more so you can hear them a little better as Miss ssanchez stated. Hilighted if you will. Throw a little salt & peppa on those bad boys

I'll work on it some more today. I like the sound of working in the vocoding. Its also a simple fix (just tweaking the dry/wet pot). And Im Allllllllll about simple today. I might brainstorm some other simple fx to add in there as well. You all need to dabble in sound production, so I can toss these files your way for some hands-on input. hehe.
I've used Reason 3.0 solely for this track. Im suprised at the quality of music I've been able to produce out of that program in the last few months. Took me well over 2 years to master that damn program, so its about time.

done mate, that is cool!

really like it....not a big fan of the vocals though or the part where you drop the bass note down an octave...but the rest is pretty solid